假如你是一名失学儿童，名叫李华，你有幸得到在中国工作的Mr. Brown的资助，可以重返校园。你给Mr. Brown

假如你是一名失学儿童，名叫李华，你有幸得到在中国工作的Mr. Brown的资助，可以重返校园。你给Mr. Brown写了一封信，内容如下：　　★ 收到钱和书后能重返校园，非常感激；　　★ 在老师的帮助下，学习有了很大的进步，受到老师的表扬和鼓励；　　★ 决心更加努力学习，取得更大的进步；　　★ 盼望见到Mr. Brown，希望他寄来一张照片。注意：1. 书信应包括以上所有要点，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；2. 词数：100左右

Dear Mr. Brown，
　  I am writing to express my deepest gratitude for the money and books you sent me. I could not have returned to school without your help. Thank you so much.
I have been working hard since I went back to school. I have made great progress in my studies with the help of my teachers. They often praise me and encourage me. But for your help, I might have left school and couldn’t have got such a good education. I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress.
How are you getting on with your life and work? I would like to meet you in person, but I have no opportunity to do so. Would you please send me a photo of yourself?
Thank you again for your generous help and best wishes!
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua　



试题分析：考查提纲类书面表达：这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来. 动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。本作文中给出的要点比较具体,故需要准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【亮点说明】范文中出现一些常见的短语：returned to 返回某处； made great progress取得进步； with the help of 在某人帮助下；made up my mind to下定决心做某事； getting on with与某人相处如何； have no opportunity to do 没有机会做某事。I have been working hard since I went back to school.这句话中考查现在完成时。But for your help, I might have left school and couldn’t have got such a good education.这句话中运用对过去的虚拟语气。I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress这个句子运用两个比较级，前后相互呼应。

respectable mr,brown

hello.

i am the student whose name is li hua that you have helped in finance to come back to school.i am quite appreciate your assistance.nowadays,thanks to my teachers' teaching,i got a great progress in studying and celebrated by my teachers.i determined to pay more and more attention on studying and get higer grades.

at last,i want to say,i am anxious to see you.so,could you send me a photo?thanks!

    li hua    the 31th of october 2010