6级作文求修改与可能分数

6级作文求修改与可能分数
When english play a crucial role all over the world,an increasing number of students learn english harder and harder instead of learning our mother tongue,Chinese.In recent years,some students even cannot speak or write a complete paragraph.They ignore the importance of learning Chinese and it's dangerous for the one who doesn't make it in mind.It's not exaggerating that we will lose ourselves if we ignore Chinese learning in the long run.There are several reasons to support my view.Initially,language is the basis of the culture.Lose our language we will lose anything.Moreover,we are Chinese,and we speak Chinese.If we ourselves do not speak Chinese or cannot speak Chinese well,what could we speak?We communicate in Chinese.How could we communicate with others without Chinese?
In accordance with this phenomenon,I reckon we should learn not only english but also Chinese.Only if we learn Chinese ,can we stand in a world as a Chinese.

我不知道你的作文题目是什么,我发现了几个错误,第一个是第一句话,when english play a crucial role, 这里应该用plays.还有下面,lose our language, we will lose anything. 我想这里应该用everything好点吧.整体来说,作文还是不错的,如果作文主题也相符的话,分数应该不低.
再问： 题目是Due Attitude Should Be Given to the Study of Chinese
再答： 那你有点偏了，人家要你写的是对汉语学习应有的态度，你给人家分析了为什么要学汉语
再问： 我写经常都偏，所以分数都上不去，纠结啊，那大概有多少？合格会不会有？
再答： 不太清楚，这得看判卷的老师了。