Hello ，everyone ！I`m Li ，and am twenty five years old . I come from xxx and it have passed five y

Hello ，everyone ！I`m Li ，and am twenty five years old . I come from xxx and it have passed five y

the things i am fond of are so many , including singing ,travelling ,doing sports and so on. 其它的都还可以。还有 说年龄时那个are 可以去掉，要么加个I
希望能采纳追问哪个are ？ 对了 so much 我是打错了 是so many 。呵呵追答打错了，是am追问我发出后自己看一遍 发现笔误很多啊 还有 也不该写 were的 应该是are
还有，把 前面的逗号去掉 这样也是可以的吧

I`m Li and am twenty five years old追答it has been five years since i came to shanghai

Hello ，everyone ！I`m Li ，and am 这里需要加上主语I，楼上刚改的那个句子还有里travel最好改为travelling。

虽然不知道你要干什么，但我觉得写的不太好，怪怪的，好像有不少地方不顺畅，如果你的自我介绍是自己写的，我建议你去找找自我介绍模版修改一下，比起用模版，错误的英语更让人讨厌。
你可以找英语好的人帮你。追问就看下有无语法错误

①I`m Li ，and am twenty five years old 改为I`m Li ，and I am twenty five years old.
②The things I`am fond of were so much . 这句感觉好奇怪，首先不用用were，be fond of加名词，加宾语，或者be fond of doing something。虽然看出你想要倒装，但是不知道那样对不对，还是直接用I am interested in many things比较保险。
③including singing 用such as
④including singing ，travel and sports 这边应该要保持一致。
⑤make an effort to do the best in the company这句也怪怪，不会改。 it have passed five years since I came to ShangHai 这句也是追问很长时间不接触英语了 忘了 were 和much 是用错了 我发出后才看到的追答我也好久没用英语，看着有错也不知道要怎么改。

。。。。。。。。。。你想要做什么。或者，我能帮助你什么吗。in the company ？你是在。。。应聘？

Good morning/ afternoon.
I'm Li. I 'm twenty-five years old. I come from _______. It has been five years since I came to Shanghai. I like singing, travelling, and playing basketball. Maybe we can go out to have fun at free time. I'll get familiar my work as quickly as I can. Have a nice day. Thank you!