请大虾们,帮我看看这篇小作文有多少语法错误、用词错误和结构错误!这是篇图表类的小作文.

请大虾们,帮我看看这篇小作文有多少语法错误、用词错误和结构错误!这是篇图表类的小作文.
A glance at the table provided that reveals people had travelled model of travel to change from 1985 to 2000 in Britain.
It is evident from the information provided that per person to used various of vehicle had been travelled average distance in England.From 3,199 miles in 1985,the number of driving claimed sharply to 4,806 miles in 2000.Second in terms of train had been used distance from 286 miles to 366 miles.To had been used long distance bus had been travelled distance how it increase rapidly and approximately two tines,from 54 miles to 124 miles.In Britain,the taxi had been driven distance how it increased scope to be most,from 13 miles to 42 miles.By the way,other model had been used from 450 miles to 585 miles.
By contrast,three mode of travel had fallen to be patency,walking,bicycle and local bus.To had seat local bus had travelled distance how it had decreased sharply,from 429 miles to 124 miles.Bicycle had sunk scope to be approximately 8 percent,255 miles in 1985.All in all,from 1985to 2000,English people had used all model of vehicle had travelled distance always to had increased.
In conclude,according to this table,we can know what the information of changing distance of English people had used various of vehicle to travelled from 1985 to 2000.
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shouqinliao 这是剑桥雅思6 test 2 的小作文。

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A glance at the table provided revealed how people's travelling method changed from year 1985 to year 2000 in Britain.
The table listed the average travel distance of each person using various modes of transport in Britain,with five of the travelling method listed having an increase in the average distance travelled per person over the 15 year period.The average travel distance of each person by car increased from 3,199 miles in year 1985 to 4,806 miles in year 2000.Average travel distance by train increased from 286 miles to 366 miles,while that of other modes of tranport increased from 450 miles to 585 miles.If the rate of increase is determined by the ratio between the average distance traveled in year 2000 and year 1985,then the average travel distance for long distance bus had almost doubled in the 15 years recorded.However,the most astonishing increase is not that of the long distance bus,but that of the taxi with its avarage travel distance increase from 13 miles per person to 42 miles per person.
On the other hand,three of the listed modes of transport had a decrease in the average travel distance per person,and they are by walking,bicycle and local bus.Average travel distance of local bus decreased sharply from 429 miles per person to 124 miles per person.That of the bicycle decreased by approximately 8 percent to only 41 miles in year 2000.And local bus has decreased from 429 miles per person to 274 miles per person.
In conclusion,according to this table,we can clearly see that the average travel distance of each person using various modes of transport had changed over the 15 year period from year 1985 to year 2000.
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如你所要求放上的修改过后的,不过这次动了大手术,你原文我基本上是没保留多少 - - 看看我修改的,如果不明白,可以HI