针对sat1 1月写作考题的

针对sat1 1月写作考题的
Should we treat people according to what they are capable of achieving instead of what they actually have done?我想问下这个开头可不可以：We admire giant figures exclusively of what they have done.So on the other hand if we put on emphasis on treating people due to their capabilities,we will probably not receive the right sense.From an individual of talents in some fields to one with plenty of accomplishment,one must first overcome a great deal of troubles in order to be regarded by others.So in this sense we should rate people according to their past feat.然后下面的例子段就写名人怎么怎么通过拥有同样能力的人没有的关键因素来成功 说明我们要通过人的过去评价他们.

首先第一二句没有 所以 这种逻辑啊...
完全不能推导出来.
第三句 看了半天 太 chiEng了吧 From...to 通常是时间上的变化.
从第三句看出 你想说的人要经过磨练,逆境才能成功.然后第四句就说 我们要从他们的past feats里估量他们的价值?逻辑非常混杂.SAT注意的是逻辑..
如果要我帮你修改下,我可以想想
再问： 好的啊！这些天练了下写作，确实发现逻辑很重要，而且开头最好要明显地表明态度的。
再答： 可以，我会尽快发给你。不建议你可以先采纳。 我打这儿了。首先拿到这个题目，我认为你有一点不错，capable of doing st equals having a ineer talent. Yes, people who was born with a inner gift will have a big fortuane in their capablity. But, Even the brilliant intelligence, need to work hard and put their unique thoughts into practice before they becom famous.( using a direct conclusion to make clear your view point, and try to change the title into another sentence which is requested to contain your position and the views of two sides in the title) Or rather, it is their ability and courageous to pratically realize the dream that effects the people, and indeed, they will then well treated by surroundings. 然后我会用 my sister 和 一个名人对比来写。 my sister 有talent 有 capablity 但没做 失败 big guy 做了努力 成功了 受到大家地 well treated 就ok了