英文高手帮我检查下我的小作文的语法及拼写错误嘛,可适当修改,适当增删

英文高手帮我检查下我的小作文的语法及拼写错误嘛,可适当修改,适当增删
Now a days,more and more adults choose continuing education to improve themselves in professional level and ability.And there are also many young men go to continuing education after finish school.Now the whole nation is setting off an upsurge of continuing education.
Continuing education has many advantages,such as:whole time,all member,comprehensiveness and self-studying.And we are in 21th century ,knowledge is power.Along with the progress of the society ,we acquired knowledge and techniques is far from enough .We all need more knowledge to compete with others.This is probably why continuing education are so popular.On the other hand,exam-oriented education make teenagers couldn't learn something what they are interested in.But the continuing education give them the chance to learn what they like.
The continuing education started much later in China than developed countries.In recent years,accounting continuing education has resulted in great achievements in China,but many problems still persist.For example,not all the certificate of continuing education can be recognized.As a old famous says,learning is endless,and life-long education has a long way to go.

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Now a days,more and more adults choose 【to】continu(ing)e 【their】education to improve themselves in professional level and ability.(And) There are also many young men 【who】(go to) continu(ing)e education after finish【ing】 school.Now the whole nation is setting off an upsurge (of)【in】 continuing education.
Continuing education has many advantages,such as:whole time,all member,comprehensiveness and self-studying.(And) 【As】 we are in 21th century ,knowledge is power.Along with the progress of (the) society ,【the】(we acquired) knowledge and techniques 【we've acquared】is far from enough .We all need more knowledge to compete with others.This is probably why continuing education 【is】(are) so popular.On the other hand,exam-oriented education (make) 【does not allow】 teenagers 【to】(couldn't) learn (some)thing【s】 (what) they are interested in.But 【by】(the) continuing education 【they are】give【n】 (them the) 【a】 chance to learn what they like.
(The) Continu(ing)【al】 education started much later in China than 【in】developed countries.In recent years,(accounting) continu(ing)【al】 education has (resulted)【achieved】 (in) great (achievements)【results】 in China,but many problems still persist.For example,not all (the) certificate【s】 of continu(ing)【al】 education (can be)【are】 recognized.As a【n】 old famous (says)【saying goes】,learning is endless,and life-long education has a long way to go.
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Now a days,more and more adults choose to continue theireducation to improve themselves in professional level and ability.There are also many young men who continue education after finishing school.Now the whole nation is setting off an upsurge in continuing education.
Continuing education has many advantages,such as:whole time,all member,comprehensiveness and self-studying.As we are in 21th century ,knowledge is power.Along with the progress of society,the knowledge and techniques we've acquaredis far from enough .We all need more knowledge to compete with others.This is probably why continuing education is so popular.On the other hand,exam-oriented education does not allow teenagers to learn things they are interested in.But by continuing education they are given a chance to learn what they like.
Continual education started much later in China than indeveloped countries.In recent years,continual education has achieved great results in China,but many problems still persist.For example,not all certificates of continual education are recognized.As an old famous saying goes,learning is endless,and life-long education has a long way to go.
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