看看高考英语作文 评分,

看看高考英语作文 评分,
你是想成为独生子女还是有兄弟姐妹：
i hope i have a brother or sister.in my eyes if i have a brother or sister ,i will have more love ,we can help each other dont always let parents to give we help,and if i have a brother or sister my life must have more happy ,love and some interesting thing,that is so beauty and so cool!if my family is only three people:my parents and me,that could loss some pleasure to me.because there is not a age like me people ,a age like me people can have more common language compete parents.so i hope i have a sister or brother.
你的班里有人熬夜做作业,午休时间也在学习,却在课堂上打瞌睡,而且早上经常懒床,导致常常来不及吃早餐：
谈谈这种现象
谈谈你对此的看法,并建议
i find now have some classmates they always sleep to late because they homework is too large,they are study is very hard ,they even the midday rest time also to study,beacuse these,they are too tired,someone even sleep at class!hower it is not worst at all thing,the worst at all thing is they get up late in the monrning ang even dont eat breakfast!
in my eyes,all these is very bad these id heart they health ang innocent they school record.we must said noto it.
i have a suggestion：our teacher can swallor our homework our classmate can go to bad early in the night,and get up early in the monrning ,the midday rest can have a little sleep.
i think these bad thing must loss in our class .lets go!

Brother and sister 可以改 siblings (兄弟姐妹）.
In my eyes 则能改成 from my perspective. (大概就是 ‘从我的角度来说.’）
I will have more love 是绝对语病!写英文不能用华语直直翻译哦!
We can help each other don't always let parents to give we help 则改成 we can help each other and don't always depend (依赖）our parents to help us.
Must have 可以改成will have.
must have more happy ,love and some interesting thing改成 will be more fun (更多乐趣） ,(love 可以省略哦!）and more interesting.
that is so beauty(这是正确的形容词么?） and so cool写作This will be awsome! （这将会非常的棒!）就行了.
if my family is only three people是错误的if there are only three people in my family (这才是正确的构造!）
that could loss some pleasure to me（又犯了直接从中文翻译成英文的错误喽!）I will feel bored. (我会觉得闷.）会不会比较恰当呢?
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because there is not a age like me people（又直接翻译了哦!）because there is no one who are same age with me. (没有与我年龄相仿的人）
,a age like me people can have more common language compete parents.so i hope i have a sister or brother.（错误错误啦!QAQ!）If there are someone who are same age with me to communicate with. (可以交流）最后一句呢P4和哦sister改成siblings就行了.
啊啊~我们老师是犯五个错误就不及格的!所以我也不知到怎么评呢...不过如果你肯加油一定会进步的!