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This table shows the changing proportion of national consumer expenditure by category between five different countries in 2002.
As can be seen from the chart,Food Drinks Tobacco is the most important expenditure category in all the coutries.Clothing Footwear and Leisure Education took 2nd and 3rd spots respectively.
In the first line ,Turkey got 32.14% rank rows first,and other countries under 30%.At the statistics about Clothing Footwear,Italy got the highest proporting with 9%.Ireland Spain Sweden and Turkey got nearly 6.5%.In the last row,Spain brought up the rear with only got 1.98%.Although Ireland Italy and Sweden exceeded 3%,Turkey rank number one with 43.5%.
According to figures,it can be said in 2002,different coutries’ consumer expending is quite different.
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This table shows the changing proportion of national consumer expenditure by categorized five different countries in 2002.
As can be seen from the chart,Food Drinks Tobacco is the most important expenditure category in all the countries,followed up by Clothing Footwear and Leisure Education respectively.
In the first line,Turkey got 32.14% rank rows first,and other countries under 30%.Looking at the statistics about Clothing Footwear,Italy got the highest proportion with 9%.Ireland Spain Sweden and Turkey got nearly 6.5%.In the last row,Spain brought up the rear with only got 1.98%.Although Ireland,Italy and Sweden exceeded by 3%,Turkey rank number one with 43.5%.
According to these figures,it was shown that in 2002,different countries seems to have quite different consumer expending.
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