求一篇托福范文

求一篇托福范文

这是戴云教主修改的一篇范文，希望对你有帮助！

People should not pay for the public transportation. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons or examples or support your ideas.

There are all kinds (of ways 去掉) of public transportation all over the world, which play (the) (an)important role in people’s daily lives. Although nearly (这里用almost或者nearly都可以， 共同点1：两者均可表示“几乎”、“差不多”，有时可换用：但有时almost比nearly表示更接近的程度，用于 any 以及 no, none, nobody, nothing, never 等否定词前，可用almost，但不能用 nearly, nearly 前可用 very, pretty, not 等词修饰，但 almost 之前不能用这些词：)everybody in different countries needs to use the public transportation, people’s attitudes towards it are entirely different. Some people insist that people should pay nothing for their using (usage) of the public transportation. (pay nothing = free of charge) Meanwhile, those who are strongly opposed to it (这个用法你使用的很好， be opposed to something) cite that people should pay for it if they want to take the advantage of the convenience (有take the convenience of something 的用法么？我没有找到，你如果有这方面的例子，可以告诉我) of the public transportation. From my own perspective, the latter one is more favorable even though I myself am one of the persons who need to spend money when take the public transportation.

The first reason I want to put forward to support the cause of paying (cause 一般指不好的事情，比如说事故的起因，在这里用有点不合适，这一句话这么说是可以的，但是有点绕，可以直接说 The first reason I use to support my statement) is that any government needs enough money to build up and perfect infrastructures including the public transportation which are of great benefit to the entire people in one country. And where do governments get the money for constructions? People who have some basic common sense should know that it is (from) the pockets of all the citizens where governments get money. Here someone who opposes to (这里用be opposed to doing/something 或者是 oppose something/doing sthing, 但是没有oppose to do something这个用法的) pay money will probably jump out to claim that now that governments levy taxes they should not ask people for money when they use the public transportation. I will give my point view (观点是point of view)which is directed against this statement. My opinion is that to build up perfect public transportation nets involving subways，buses and any other traffic transportations or auxiliary installations needs huge public tax subsidies. If all the people use the public transportation for free, it will mean that governments will spend much more money to support the operation of the public transportation. Maybe there won’t be enough money to carry on new constructions. The financial burden of governments resulting from free public transportation might vastly increase and reach the point where they (这里指代有点不明)cannot stand. If we also think over the large amount of fuels used by traffic transportations and the salaries paid to staffs who work to operate the public transportations, I think everyone can reach the conclusion that if one country isn’t so rich that all the people can enjoy high welfare in every area of daily lives(是否可以表达成 if one country is not rich enough to guaranty that all the citizens are covered with the high welfare in every aspects of their daily lives), maybe it’s unavoidable to pay when using the public transportation (the payment for using the public transportation is almost unavoidable). 你可以看一下那个表达方式更好

Another important reason (which) cannot be ignored is that the number of passengers will undoubtedly increase rapidly just like traveling by skyrocket (这里可以说 will undoubtedly be skyrocket/skyrocketing就可以表达你想说的意思了)in case of the totally free public transportation. As we know, public transportation plays an irreplaceable role in people’s daily social life. Particularly in some metropolis like New York, London and Beijing, there is an amazing flow volume of passenger using public transportation everyday. Just imagine the rapidly growing population taking public transportation instead of private vehicles or walking in case that the tickets are free. And the traffic system is likely to be disordered. Can you imagine the picture that hundreds of thousands of people crowd (are crowding, 因为你的picture描述的是一个进行中的状态，所以用进行时更好，而且要注意并列成分的关系) in subways, or hectometers of long lines in airports are waiting for check in? Beijing’ subways can be taken as a typical example. According to the CCTV, during the three-day vacation of the May Day, there were nearly 14 million people choose (注意在there be 举行中的动词要用进行时或是被动态而不是动词原形，所以这里应该用choosing)subways to go for a journey. How terrible it is! It will be too crowded to stand if the public transportation is totally free. Consequently, to avoid this disaster, chargeable tickets are needed.