My Bedroom This is my bedroom.It’s very nice.

My Bedroom This is my bedroom.It's very nice.
My Bedroom
This is my bedroom. It's very nice. My family photo is on the wall. My quilt is on the bed,too. My clock is on the desk. It is white. A set of keys are under the chair. A computer is on the table. Look! That is my bookcase. It is brown. There are some books in it. On the bookcase is my white model plane.

求学霸看看这篇作文有没有语法错误,

第四句去掉too 不错的 只不过重复的单词太多了
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