修改作文：On Students’ Selecting Lecturers

1.有些大学允许学生自由选择某些课程的任课教师
2.学生选择教师时所考虑的主要因素
3.学生自选任课教师的益处和可能产生的问题

On Students’ Selecting Lecturers
With the development of modernization and civilization, more and more freedom come to our lives ,one of which is selection .Recently, the phenomenon that some universities allow undergraduates choose their lectures for some specific courses.has been brought to our attention .
As student from different backgrounds would examine from differe angle on the same case ,but all in all ,the main factors that undergraduates take account when they select lectures as follows:Foremost ,the lectures title(职称),obviously, doctors and mastors are popularer than professors ,And then ,the experience of lectures play an important role as well.
Free chossing of lectures benefit students quiet a lot ,the most effective one is improving the quality of study . As every coin has two sides , it is no exception, for instance, some student make choice blind.

On Students’Selecting Lecturers
With the development of modernization and civilization, more and more freedom come to our lives, one of which is (about) selection. Recently, the phenomenon that some universities allow undergraduates (加入to) choose their (lecturers) for some specific courses has been brought to our attention .
As (students) from different backgrounds would examine from (different) (angles) on the same case, (however,) all in all, the main factors that undergraduates take (加入into) account when they select (lecturers) as follows: Foremost, the (lecturers') (titles). Obviously, doctors and mastors are (more) popular than professors. And then, the experience of (lecturers) (plays) an important role as well.
Free (selecting) of (lecturers) benefit students quiet a lot. (The) most effective one is improving the quality of study. (But as) every coin has two sides, it is no exception, for instance, some (students) (can) make (choices) (blind/blindly).

总评：第一段稍显啰嗦，第二段更应该精简，但是第三段太过简略。

on the lecturers selecting with the development of modernization and civilization, we have got more and more freedom, so is the freedom of lecturers selection of students. recently, the phenomenon that some universities allow undergraduates to choose their lectures for each specific courses has been brought to our attention . students from different backgrounds would examine from different angles on the same case ,but all in all ,the main factors that undergraduates take account when they select lectures are as follows: foremost ,the lectures title(职称). obviously, doctors and masters are more popular than professors with lower degree. and then ,the experience of lectures play an important role as well. free chosing of lectures benefits students quite a lot. the most effective one is improving the quality of study . as every coin has two sides , it is no exception, for instance, some students make choice blind.