哪位大侠来帮我看看下面这篇英语短文有没有错误！！！

She is a beautiful girl.She comes from Japan. She was born on 1994.11.9.Although she is 15 years old.，she is a popular singer. She wants to be a singer when she was a kid.

She has purple eyes and yellow hair. She is medium height.And she is thin.Her favorite colors are black ，purple and blue.Her favorite subject is music.But she doesn’t like math.She also dislike homework.

She is good at singing.But she is hard and She is a strong person.

Where there is a will,there is a way.I should learn from her！

谢谢！

She is a beautiful girl.She comes from Japan. She was born on 1994.11.9.日期不能这样写的，应该是9 November ， 1994 。Although she is 15 years old.，she is a popular singer. She wants to be a singer when she was a kid.

She has purple eyes and yellow hair. She is medium height.And she is thin.Her favorite colors are black ，purple and blue.Her favorite subject is music这里没有转折关系吧，感觉用着多余。she doesn’t like math.She also dislike homework.

She is good at singing.But这个也多余 she is hard要表示她很努力的话，用she works hard比较好and She is a strong person.

Where there is a will,there is a way.I should learn from her！

文章感觉有些衔接不怎么通顺呢

亲爱的楼主:

She was born on 1994.11.9.

改:She was born on 11.9.1994.

英语的时间排序是 月.日.年

其他的都可以,

谢谢采纳

born on 1994 改为 born in 1994

She wants to 改为 She wanted to

She wanted to be a singer when she was a kid.

She is of medium height.

...but she doesn't like maths.

She also dislikes doing homework.

....good at singing. She is a headstrong person

以上有错的改法

She is a beautiful girl.She comes from Japan. She was born in 9th of Novermber,1994.Although she is 15 years old,she is a popular singer. She wants to be a singer since she was a kid.

She has purple eyes and yellow hair. She is medium height.And she is thin.Her favorite colors are black ，purple and blue.Her favorite subject is music.But she doesn’t like math.She also dislike homework.

She is good at singing.But she is hard and She is a strong person.

When there is a will,there is a way.I should learn from her！