帮我看看我写的英语作文有哪些语法错误!

帮我看看我写的英语作文有哪些语法错误!
my hobby
I want to tell you about my hobby.I collect shoes .I have benn doing since I was 13.my friend know i like NBA very much.so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pairs of them .
the first one i ever got a pair of new shoes .it was cool and it calledNO.1 kobe just a month i bought another shoes
it was good-looking and cool it calls NO7.T-MAC now i ever store them in boxes under my bed
my mother says i have to stop because they are very dear
she doesn't wand to buy for me any more
but i see.i have to stop because i run out of my money and my room to story them!

I want to tell you about my hobby. I collect shoes（改成I like collecting shoes更好）.I have benn（是been） doing（加 this） since I was 13. my friend know（knows） i like NBA very much. so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pairs of them .
the first one（改成time） i ever（删去ever） got a pair of new shoes .it（合并成一句,删去.it） was cool and it calledNO.1 kobe just a month (加after)i bought another shoes
it was good-looking(改成nice,good-looking是形容人的） and cool （加,）it calls NO7.T-MAC .now i ever（改成have） store（改成stored） them in boxes under my bed
my mother says i have to stop because they are very dear
she doesn't wand（是want） to buy for me any more
but i see. i have to stop because i run out of my money and my room to story（是store） them!

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