【雅思作文免费批改】雅思大作文求高手批改Somepeoplesaythatgovernmentsshouldpayfor...

【雅思作文免费批改】雅思大作文求高手批改Somepeoplesaythatgovernmentsshouldpayfor...

【答案】 have witnessed
　　paying 改成to pay
　　既然From my point of view 就已经要表明我的观点了为什么又来个 在我表达观点之前呢?删除掉比较好
　　part of the public 我不知道表达地不地道,如果你认为是有根据的话就用 但those 肯定要去掉.
　　或者直接Those who insist ...就好了
　　to pay for the medical.
　　financial 不是名词 最好换成 financial income
　　不要 is come from 就是comes from
　　individuals tax 改成 taxes paid by individuals
　　which is also used for .basic acquirements
　　lead这句改成 causes an increase in the cost of living
　　which make some .and diseases
　　the financial used in other area 改成 financial expenses spent in.areas will decreas
　　industry
　　that will give rise to negative influences on the entire coutry's development
　　their power fighting for a better life.不是很地道
　　It is not only the government's responsibility but also an obligation society should assume to guarantee the health of masses and an access to higher education
　　difficult to reach an agreement on this issue
　　only if the government and individuals join hands together can.
　　错误很多/.我只是把一些明显的地方指出来
　　.而且语言方面不是很地道,词语的用法很呆板
　　至于你观点的见地什么的我都不讨论了.
　　只能说你英语水平实在有待加强

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