more opportunity对吗

more opportunity对吗

第一句有语法错误,应该改成A will offers me more opportunity.

when i was a little boy, my grandmother often told me that success always depends on luck. i had no ideas about this at that time. as i am growing up, and gaining more and more knowledge from school, i wonder whether this is right. in fact, in my point of view, people's success only relates to hard work rather than luck. my reasons go as follows. first of all, hard working can make us become successful a little easier. practices help a singer earn lots of singing skill, keeping on writing everyday can make a writer become more skillful, and a successful student basic of a great number of exercises once the singer becomes famous start, the writer's works become well known, and the student gets through a hard exam, how can we say that their successes do not result from hard work? obviously, hard work can give us more knowledge and skills, and lead us to success. as for me, when i prepare for the tofel test, i also practice my english skill everyday, hoping that i can earn a good mark.. and i am sure it would help. second of all, hard work provides us lots of opportunities to become successful. let us see our daily life, a teacher may appreciate a studious student very much, so this student is likely to be the monitor of the class. a hard working employee can be trusted by his or her supervisor, and s/he may become the company's manager in the future. in other words, hard work can give us good fame, which can help us to be trusted by other people, especially by those leaders. and later, there comes the success. although some people succeed because of their good luck, they must have been hard working, and still hard working, too. if they only have good luck, and lazy on work, even if they get the opportunities, they can only get failures. i believe that success belongs to those who is working hard and studious, because hard working provides convenience job, and seates good fain to success. http://wenwen.sogou.com/z/q764720792.htm