英语作文 麻烦看下我又没有语法错误

英语作文 麻烦看下我又没有语法错误
是关于餐桌礼仪的
Hello I know you will come to China recently and ask for help to know China's table protocol I can give you some advice
When you wait for food by table ,don't play the chopsticks because other people may feel you aren't serious(我想表达的是严肃不知这个词可可以） You should remember not talk to other people when food is full of your mouth.And when you eat soup,pay attention to dringking quietly,or you will make other one think you are impolite
Remember all my advice and do it ,you will have a good meal!

错误好像是没有 ,但是我想给楼主的文章加几个小小的建议~
一,ask for help to know China's table protocol ,可以在know 后面+ 一个 ‘about’ ,这样看读起来就更好了.
二,你可以把serious 改成impolite ,不礼貌的.会更恰当一些.
三,我适当的建议用几个从句会使文章更加出色!
比如：
You should remember not talk to 可以变为：You should remember that not talk to .
而且把talk to 改成talk with others 更好,更简洁一些.并且在when food之前似乎加上the 更为妥当一些.
这里有个语法错误.
And when you eat soup,pay attention to dringking quietly,
注意,这里的pay应该用现在分词,表示正在做某事.现在分词做伴随状语.因为pay attention 这个动作是伴随着eat soup 这个动作同时发生的,所以pay得用ing形式 .
再者,pay attention to 后面是不是不应该用ing形式?!to do 才对啊~
最后一个,or you will make other one think you are impolite,可以把or 换成 otherwise ,表示否则的意思.比 or 用起来更为恰当!
整篇作文写的还是很不错的~

这个解释是对的