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Some people think governments should spend as much money as possible exploring outer space (for example,traveling to the Moon and to other planets).Other people disagree and think government should spend this money for our basic needs on earth.Which is these two opinions do you agree with?Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
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A profound changes of the modern technology has been seen in recent years.With the develop of the technology,people have created many high technological things to explore our space with the help by the government.Some people agree that this is a good idea.Meanwhile,still some deem that the government need to spend more money to people’s basic life.I agree with the former.Because technology is now playing an important part in the world.it’s worth doing it.
The government need to spend money to the technological space programme.Nowadays,the resource on earth has been decreasing with an incredible rate.It been proved that the resource on earth will be soon used up in a century.So we need to spend more time and money on the space programme and try to find the new resource instead of the one on earth.
Also,some of the space’s resource is much better than the earth’s.Like the soil on Moon we can grow fruit on moon and it also grows better than in earth does.For example,the Chinese spaceship travelled on Moon and grew a kind of capsicum on it in 2004.When the spaceship travelled again to take the capsicum back.Scientist found that the capsicum which is grown on moon is much bigger and sweeter than the earth’s.that can be proved that the soil on Moon is better than earth’s.so it’s worth for government to spend money on space programme to explore the universe.
Last but not least,we can travel to the space and visit other planet as an entertainment in the future.Nowadays,there are many various kind of entertainment for human being to enjoy.As time go by,it will become boring.Then we will be more looking forward to using high technology for entertainment,such as travelling to space and go for a holiday on Mar or Moon in the future.It will make human’s life much more colorful.
In conclusion,it is a good idea for the government to spend money as much as money they can to support the space expert programme.Because there are many various of resource will be found if we keep on exploring on it.And also it will entertain human in the future by travelling in the space.

A profound change in modern technology has been seen in recent years. For example, people have created many high technological things to explore the universe with the help of oure government. Some people agree that it is a good idea to explore the universe. However, some people deem that the government need to spend more money in people’s basic life. I agree with the former because technology is now playing an important role in the process of society and it’s worthy in doing it. (我对你的这段作了修改,不过,你的最后一句,就是使你的理由,你支持政府把钱花 探索宇宙的奥秘上,那么你的理由是什么? 理由要是开发宇宙的好处,而你在讲科技的好处是什么,科技和社会的好处)
The government need to spend money in exploring the technological space programme. Nowadays, the resource on earth has been decreasing with an incredible rate. It been proved that the resource on earth will be soon used up in a century. So we need to spend more time and money on the space programme and try to find the new resource instead of the one on earth. ( 这一段也不对,第一句就不对,所以我没有帮你怎么改,因为你要的时理由,这个要写你支持那个观点的第一个理由是什么)
Also, some types of resources from the space are better than the same types of sources in the Earth. For example, we can plant fruit on Moon’s soil. {and it also grows better than in earth does.(由于本人对生长在地球上的植物和生长在月球上的植物有什么不同了解不多,所以这句你要自己写,不过你这句写的不好)} In 2004, A Chinese spaceship landed on the Moon and planted a type of capsicum on the Moon. When the spaceship came back to the Moon, Chinese astronaut took the capsicum back to the Earth. Scientists found that the capsicum that was planted on the Moon was much bigger and sweeter than the one in the Earth’s. Therefore, it’s worth for government to spend money on exploring the universe.
Furthermore, we can travel to the space and visit other planet as an entertainment in the future. Nowadays, there are many various kinds of entertainment for human. As time goes by, it wil get boring. Then we will more look forward to using high technology for entertainment, such as travelling to space and go for a holiday on the Mars or Moon at that time. It will make human’s life much more colorful.
In conclusion, it is a good idea for the government to spend money in support the space reasearches. Some types of resources in the Unverse are better than the resources in the Earth. It will be the major entertainmen for human beings in the future by travelling to travel in the Universe.