修改作文,

修改作文,

I have a lot of hoppies.I like play the piano so I play it every day.I think play paino is relaxting.I like dance.I dance three times a week.I like music very much but I don't sing.watching TV is also one of my hoppy.I play it twice a week.I think it is interesting.Sometines I like watching TV.I watch it after dinner.I have fun in it.I like……(这里看不清）too.I play it twice a month.It is tired for me.
您这写得也太……
记着,有了every day就不要再写社么表示次数的词了,很矛盾.还有,最后一句话还是去了吧,它和主题实在扯不上多大关系,写作文不要迷失了主题,还有,注意语句连贯
作文水平有待提高啊同志,虽说我的水平也不咋的,但,看到你写的,我欣慰了.
话说,你的爱好真的好多,你应该很忙吧,想我别说打球,连吃顿饭都懒得动弹.
这篇文章写得还不懒
别怪我语句直接了点
再问： i have many habbies,such as ……这是本来就有的，修改一下，有问题可以发到私信上
再答： I have a lot of hoppies.such as play the piano,dance and so an. I like playing the piano so I play it every day.I think playing paino is relaxting.I like dancing.I dance three times a week.I like music very much but I don't like singing.Playing volleyball is also one of my hoppies.I play it twice a week.I think it is interesting.Sometines I like watching TV.I watch it after dinner.I have fun in it. I like……(这里看不清）too.I play it twice a month.It is tired for me. Sorry,改的过程中，发现有点小错误，不过在下面改过来了，所以，你直接照下面追问里的回答抄或发挥吧。上面的，就当作废吧。