帮我看一下这篇英文作文里有没有错误

帮我看一下这篇英文作文里有没有错误
I'm tried to forget this day because I realy don't like growing up.
The beforetime,I was always hoping my birthday,because of the birthday cake and the gifts.
There weren't any gifts or cakes in my birthday this year.
I'm already 23 years old.I miss the past time so much.
I was old a year old.（我想说我又老了一岁）So I did't think that the birthday is a happy thing.
That's why I didn't celebrate my birthday this year.
Anyway,Happy Birthday To Me!
October 14th，I tried to forget this day because I really don't like growing up.
I used to expect my birthday，because of birthday cake and gifts.
There weren't any gifts or cakes in my birthday this year.
I'm already 23.I'm missing the past time so much.
I was old a year old.So I didn't think that the birthday is a happy thing.
That's why I didn't celebrate my birthday this year.
Anyway，Happy Birthday To Me！
这是我又改过的，

I'm tried to forget this day because I realy don't like growing up.
“I'm”的意思是“我是”,而你这里要用的应该是“我曾经”,所以应该是“I have”或者是“I've”
[I've tried to forget this day because I really don't like growing up.]
The beforetime,I was always hoping my birthday,because of the birthday cake and the gifts.
不需要说“以前”,直接把句子变成过去试就可以了.另外beforetime是中国英语,以后绝对不可以用.
[I have always been hopeful for my birthday, because of the birthday cake and the gifts.]
There weren't any gifts or cakes in my birthday this year.
我觉得直接把句子继续下去更好一点.翻译是：可是今年并没有礼物或蛋糕.
[This year however, there were neither gifts or cakes.]
I'm already 23 years old. I miss the past time so much.
句号改成逗号了.past time的time是多余的,另外没什么问题.
[I'm already 23 years old, I miss the past so much.]
I was old a year old.（我想说我又老了一岁）So I did't think that the birthday is a happy thing.
我又大了一岁,过生日不再有趣了.
[I am another year older, birthdays are no longer exciting.]
That's why I didn't celebrate my birthday this year.
Anyway,Happy Birthday To Me!
每次只要有人用“anyway”,我就会觉得怪怪的,应该用“anyways”更好一点.可是在这里用“nevertheless”（意思是“尽管如此⋯⋯”）更加professional一点吧.
[Nevertheless, happy birthday to me.]
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And happy birthday to you!