英语高手帮我看看,我写的这段有没有错误

英语高手帮我看看,我写的这段有没有错误
Last winter I went to the CuiHua Mountain ski resort with my friends.
The snow was falling down on the grand; Mountains were covered by white,when we arrived.The splendid scene I have never seen before.As soon as putted on the snowsuit,we entered in the freshman practice area of the ski resort quickly.After all of us were gathered,our coach began to teaching us the basic skill for how to skiing.She told us how to use the ski sticks,keeping the body balance and protecting us from the clash.
As soon as the Introductions was finished.
I tried to follow her instruction,but it was easy to say but hard to do.I felled down for several times.When I turned around I saw the others were enjoying in the game.I got very angry.So I began to compliant the bad weather and the stupid ground makes me slipped.Tim is my best friends,When I nearly plan to give up,Jim stretched out his hand to me .He held my hand and taught me how to ski for a long time.At last I could do it very well with any help.
Thanks to my friend Tim and my coach.It's a significative day in my lifetimes.When I lose courage and heart I will remember the day.It will give me courage and make me stronger,I believe.

第二段 1 putted是什么?2 how to skiing 中的how to 去掉
第三段 instructions改为 conduct
第四段 1 instruction改为 conduct
2 when i turned around 后面加上逗号
3 compliant 改为complain
4 stupid ground makes me slipped 是否是抄写错误?
5 plan to give up改为 planned to .
6 At last I could do it very well with any help中的 with 改为 without
可能还有一些细节,相信你可以自己找到.标点符号的使用要注意,还有就是语言的简练性.